John_Hamby wrote:I don't know much about form but I don't know if that's really a sonata (needs more movements, I think).
That's why it the "little" piano sonata
John_Hamby wrote:I-Rhythmically I didn't find it very interesting. I really don't like the sound of repeated notes at that particular speed; it's too slow to use an even rhythmic grouping like that for a single note passage (unless an arpeggio kind of thing like Moonlight Sonata 1st Mvmt, but even then, the note choice has to make up for it).
I have tried at a faster speed, but I think it ruined the effect of the song.
John_Hamby wrote:-The part right after that long, single-note thing in the middle was probably my favorite part. Interesting note choice and you formed some cool chords. I really didn't like that long, single note passage though, maybe add something under it, do it faster, I dunno, it just seems to go on and on.
I would have to say, that is my favorite part too, the transition into "42," the halfnote cords, just turned out great, but that's just me...
John_Hamby wrote:-Overall, it just felt somewhat empty. I think in many places (including the part I said was my favorite) I got an impression of what you were trying to do, but you just didn't really take advantage of the versatility of the piano. The chords could have been bigger and wider; in general there could've been more polyphony and it could have sounded thicker and fuller.
To tell you the truth, I think it is too thick in some place, or perhaps the cords are just too forte, but I'll look in to this...
John_Hamby wrote:Really not bad though. It sounds to me like a skeleton of what could be a pretty good piece, just build more onto it. I wrote a waltz awhile back that I posted and after getting some suggestions I went back and added a second melody to go with the first melody and the waltz accompaniment. It ended up sounding MUCH better. I think this piece mostly just needs stuff added to it, not stuff taken away.
Like I said a above, I'll look into it. Currently I'm working on a Jazz band arrangement of the piece...